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    dots Submission Name: Rehabdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 558



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    dotsRehabdots
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    Today is different,
    Now, you've heard these words before,
    But today I will change my ways,
    And this time I'm sure,
    Today, you are sick and tired,
    Of the same old plot,
    Usually involving me,
    And when I am supposed to stop,
    Yesterday, I improved, but
    Last night brought relapse,
    So I made up excuses,
    Face-valued as facts,
    I promise, today is different,
    And I'm learning to cope,
    I will not love you tomorrow,
    Or atleast I can hope.




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 13:23:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This belongs in a rehabilitation facility,like a poster poem on the wall as A LIFE reminder to recovering addicts and if this is that deep that it can encourage a person in that stage of their life then of course I like it.5stars


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    | Posted on 2008-03-08 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem does what I think a poem should do. Provoke thought without laying it out on the table. Nice job! Keep up the work
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by LadyVixen | [ Reply to This ]
      I wrote a similar poem once on being addicted to someone called "In Your Wonderland".
    Your poem was very much the poems I like to read: short, simple and captivating with a deeper message lurking somewhere behind the words.
    It was only at the beginning that it stuttered a bit, as if it struggled to get in a good flow, but by the end of it, I very much liked it.
    Keep writing. L.
    | Posted on 2008-03-03 00:00:00 | by Leila | [ Reply to This ]


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