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    dots Submission Name: found a waydots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    and we all just fell apart
    anywhere that felt like safety
    or at least safer than the floor
    and we all just cried out our hearts
    anywhere that felt amazing
    or at least more amazing than the floor
    and we all just stained our tongues
    with words that felt like changing
    he told her, �tonite will die,
    memories notwithstanding.�




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 16:12:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is extremly interesting...i have to agree the title is what grabbed me at first...and reading it i enjoyed it...but wasn't fully getting it either...i'm not one to pretend i know something i don't so i'm curious about this piece and exactly what you were expressing...purps
    | Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really cool. the title really grabbed my attention, and then the last two lines were my absolute favorite lines. I dont think i hvae read anything like this in a long time, if ever.
    faves material
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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