Description: This is poetry that i'm just trying different styles or some stuff i'm making up lol so it will be strange
White Spaces -------------------------------------------
A book lays on the table,
All alone.
A rook flew from the pages,
Knowledge flown.
Black wings of ink,
Dripping sage.
Crow sings out loud,
Melody vague.
All over pages,
Are white spaces
Where black letters
Have not found.
I actually like this but think the last line could be a bit stronger. Have not found leaves the reader thinking it's incomplete, what haven't I found? either change Have to Are or change the word found to something more descriptive and less passive in voice.
I have to admit I kept thinking of Poe's Raven and To Kill A Mockingbird when I was reading this. It's just the imagery, but I liked it unless your using the Raven as an imagery of Death in which case it screws up the idea of knowledge being good for you and reads more like too much knowledge will kill you...lol
This to me is a bit weird. I'm not quite sure what to say about it except that it is abstract. I'm not quite sure what you were going for here, so I can't comment to that.
I'm not going to say I liked it, but I'm not going to say I didn't either.
Submission Name: White Spaces
