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    dots Submission Name: faithdots
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    Author: essence of life
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    dotsfaithdots
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    In the end past the stars you can hear her cry.

    Begging for home the girl who lost her way.

    Turn her back though I tried so hard but It still doesn't matter.

    Her trust was in me but I couldn't change her faith in the end.




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 19:20:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm....this is very meaningful.

    I like line with 'turn her back though I tried so hard'

    it's my favorite of the submission.

    keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2010-02-01 00:00:00 | by alyssafrench16 | [ Reply to This ]


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