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    dots Submission Name: numb to deathdots
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    Author: essence of life
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    dotsnumb to deathdots
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    I can't feel your touch suddenly so cold.
    Numbed by your consent killing of me and rebirth of you in me.
    Why can't I be me instead of your sad dream of me. I'm so numb I forgot how to bleed!!!.




    Submitted on 2008-03-03 19:36:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Its short. I wish It was longer.
    I liked it but Again the length killed me...

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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