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    dots Submission Name: To Live Againdots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 835
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 962


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    dotsTo Live Againdots

    My hands are rotting the next second
    My eyes popping out in minutes to go
    These ears starting to hear no sound
    My heart begins beating too slow

    I'm going through senses fail
    I'm going to exchange my scale

    Every effort to make me go back
    Is just another time to waste
    There's no other exit to track
    Is just another thing to taste

    I'm going to crumble to ashes
    I'm going to lose some answers

    These body of mine is aging through times
    I can't escape I can't decline
    I have to pass another path to pain
    I have to live and die and living again

    I'm going to crumble to ashes
    I'm going to lose some answers

    I have to write another question
    To draw out the answers in motion
    In flesh,In moving body
    In Blood,In moving body

    Submitted on 2008-03-04 00:09:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man good composed f**kin' structure! You were very very on point with every line.Had I done this there would have been a sonnet sequence.I'll toss you 5stars
    1.The ability and chance to live again is good but painful in the sense that we believe it's fresha an better start for us but then in comes the barricade stopping the great colors, hogging the good s**t.
    2.The reader has to read it twice without skimming.You caught their attention.Even if you had pieced it together with not a single stanza
    3.Your vocabulary mechanics are quite acceptional I mght add.I can tell you've been doing this for a while. Keep up the good s**T RG
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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