Man good composed f**kin' structure! You were very very on point with every line.Had I done this there would have been a sonnet sequence.I'll toss you 5stars
1.The ability and chance to live again is good but painful in the sense that we believe it's fresha an better start for us but then in comes the barricade stopping the great colors, hogging the good s**t.
2.The reader has to read it twice without skimming.You caught their attention.Even if you had pieced it together with not a single stanza
3.Your vocabulary mechanics are quite acceptional I mght add.I can tell you've been doing this for a while. Keep up the good s**T RG