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    dots Submission Name: Of The Seadots
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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 365/561/240
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 82
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 463



    Description:
       of the sea, why me, why me.


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    dotsOf The Seadots
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    The dark in the air that is silence
    will drown me tonight
    and I will speak
    to the omnipotent fish.

    Their minor scales and attention to detail
    jabs me with the eternal needle
    filled with a power
    that is a certain poison.

    Screech and scream in the sea,
    cold as rain upon frozen, icy feet,
    and feel the unrelenting pressure
    of a sway, and of the sea.





    Submitted on 2008-03-04 00:49:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "omnipotent fish"

    That's a real funny line. Funny in a good way. I didn't know fish were all powerful. Well, now I've learned something.

    I love the sea. It is both a positive and negative thing, and I love your take on the negative side: the cold water, drowning, the dark waters. Your emotions just choke on water.

    Stab. Needle. Scream. Deathly watery dream.
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome! -I voted it a Wow!
    And let me just say that I love omnipotent fish.
    :)
    The darkness and cold a pressure of the deep sea works so well with the emotions you write of. The whole theme of this is great.
    I like the line "Their minor scales and attention to detail" too...
    -Ceyx
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]



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