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    dots Submission Name: The PhishNetdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe PhishNetdots
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    It's like on the other side of the screen,
    There's a person I can't see,
    I know her, but I wonder does,
    She know me,
    Not literally, metaphorically,
    Me as I am,
    Soul, heart bound together with,
    Memory I call it RAM,
    Excuse me...
    Like a tap on the shoulder,
    The fact relaxed me,
    That plus now i'm older,
    Cache 1- Cache 2,
    LPT- COM4,
    I'm different by my talk,
    Now that I'm sure,
    It's you on the screen,
    when Talk to you
    Type in your name--
    Plus it's awesome cool,
    Just to hear your voice,
    As if your read the emails,
    voice like smooth choclate,
    It's like i prevail--
    But here it comes again,
    at tap on the shoulder, uhhh.....
    Stop the emails,
    Reply says" it's over, bruh"..
    Huh... what's this? my jargon's,
    Messed up,
    message boards, chat
    Replies back, I'm all fessed up.
    I got played
    Then spun around like a CD,
    Never skipped a beat,
    But now you should see me,
    I'm tore up,
    Now that it's on face book,
    the crazy part is--
    This all of what they took,
    The pictures, the stories,
    The Biggest Confessions.....


    I psyked ya'll out,
    But ya'll get the lesson
    Learn it




    Submitted on 2008-03-04 08:45:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting piece and with the current technological times - the jargon, the being in touch but in a non-intimate way.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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