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    dots Submission Name: A Name on the Winddots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots A Name on the Winddots

    A name on the wind awoke me,
    Ever the night was dark.
    There, that whispered name, it broke me,
    Under the Moon’s pale ark,
    That rode across the starry sea
    Like a goblin-oared barque.

    Then that name was howled like water
    Fast rushing through a flume,
    The name of dread Wotan’s daughter,
    The harbinger of doom.
    I dreamed of both love and slaughter
    Beneath this dark night’s gloom.

    Submitted on 2008-03-04 10:14:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It had the feel of tales of yore, which I liked. I've read some of your other stuff and they all paint a very clear setting. It seems to me that you ought to try writing a novel of some sort.

    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      This write was KOOL. Short and powerful. It was if I were there, breathing, living it.
    GREAT work.

    Blessed be

    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the wording and the feeling I get from the overall poem. But I especially liked the 2nd, 3rd, & 4th lines. That name, it broke me, under the pale moons ark. Damn I love the feeling and imagery there. I can picture the person who tells this, crying under the light of the full moon, carving the name into their arm. I love this.
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Of course, this is very elegant. It's good to see that you still write beautifully. I love all these mysterious poems you have-ghosts and whispered names.
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This was really good... I liked it alot
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Names are full of power, arent they?
    I enjoyed this dark poem, and the legendary feel it has to it.
    I wonder, does the poem speak of Wotan of the Norse pantheon, or am I confusing the name with another legend?
    At any rate, this is a wonderful read.
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I love that title! This sounds like a quote from a Soldier/Sailor's nightmare! Excellent ghostly verse, this!
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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