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    dots Submission Name: orgasm addictdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       ummmm..... yeah. please dont think of me beating you blue as a bad think unless you really dont think id take care of that blue later.... love yo


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    dotsorgasm addictdots
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    im a nymphomatic
    orgasm addict
    and often times i feel perverted
    i remember the first time i squirted
    i remember the first time it actually hurted
    but not in a bad way though
    and somehow i still had to let go
    and say slow
    the fuck down
    i get horney around clowns
    i want that guy who keeps trying to be around
    me to drown
    he sucked so bad
    i got kinda mad
    that he wasted my finger fuck time
    not that i normally mind
    but even his brain sucked
    stop hitting on me
    until you can last longer than three
    seconds of penetration
    do you need a demonstration
    of how to bang
    honestly, i dont care how long you hang...
    around
    and when i bite
    please dont make a sound
    cuz ill start screamin back
    and you dont want us to get caught do you
    cuz if we did i just might beat you blue
    its true
    so unless you really know your good
    dont even try me
    under fucking stood????




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      its very.. straight-forward. in the first line you can tell where the rest of the poem is going to go, but the idea of how much of a nymph you are, dies out when you started (what seemed like) ranting about a guy that cant satisfy you.

    it kinda switched ideas halfway through.
    | Posted on 2008-04-06 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]
      I have one word for this write NICE!!!!!
    not to be pervertic or anything but I really like the way you can really expreese yourself and I find that to be hot in a women such as youself very erotic yet bold and strong I like it.
    keep writing and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2008-03-06 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]
      this was much different than your other posts i've read kinda bold and to the point i must say anywaz not much else to say

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    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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