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Beautiful girl...


Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23 /52 /32
Words: 183
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Beautiful girl...



Hearts bound together,
Like paper mache.
you thought it'd last forever
Until that fateful day
he torn you down
and tossed you away...

Beautiful girl, so sweet, forget it.
I'm not gonna let you end it.
put down the knife, get away from those pills
I won't watch you do this to yourself,
because of him.

Broken and bleeding
hopeless and weeping
in the end you thought you'd die alone
look at me now, with those bright blue eyes
i won't let you give up,
no i can't let you give up...

Beautiful girl, so sweet, forget it.
I'm not gonna let you end it.
put down the knife, get away from those pills
I won't watch you do this to yourself,
because of him.
Beautiful girl, so sweet, forget it.
I'm not gonna let you end it.
put down the knife, get away from those pills
I won't watch you do this to yourself,
because of him.

Its okay it will all go away
i won't let you do this yourself, because of him...






Submitted on 2008-03-05 00:36:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Interesting piece. A depressing read, indeed. It's a shame that a lot of girls like this don't have friends to count on...
| Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by David Moran | [ Reply to This ]


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