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    dots Submission Name: Lightdots
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    Author: shadow of death
    ASL Info:    17/M/baltimore
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 38/53/34
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Darkness of light to come.
    Throught the sadness take you flight.
    And become the wings that pierce the fail spreading strong and through the night.
    Fall in to the light at last by the cold exposing sun.
    I was granted freedom to become the chosen one
    Throught the mirror light reflected maracules to see my soul through away the mask that hides the deeper me.
    Breaking the dark of night peircing through the painted sky.
    Cut it all away from yesterday till a new era's in sight.
    Unlock the heart within let it spread it's wings and sore .
    Rising up through life through th dark of night and fly on forever more.




    Submitted on 2008-03-05 11:23:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have finally read this and this is an excellent poem. Why didn't I read this before.
    | Posted on 2008-05-02 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good. I loved the creepy kind of flow i got from it. Some spelling and grammatical errors that you need to fix, but I did like it. Sorry it took so long to comment, i started to type you one before, but it didnt come up. but here it is!
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good. I loved the creepy kind of flow i got from it. Some spelling and grammatical errors that you need to fix, but I did like it. Sorry it took so long to comment, i started to type you one before, but it didnt come up. but here it is!
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. i liked the ending. "fly on forever more" it was cool. we all seem to have a mask in a way. its like, we hide behind it, whether we know it or not. some of us dont even realize that it is a misk, but somehow we know it just doesnt seem to be, "the real me" you know. i dont even know who i really am yet, but i feel im getting closer to knowing myself as a person, rather than as a creepy and what other people expect of the creepy. or even the critter. its hard to explain. but one day well all either lose our mask or succumb to it. rather die to the falsity of our self and our fears. keep posting. i hope to read more by you soon.





    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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