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Submission Name: MEANS NOTHING dots

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Author:	being me
Elite Ratio:	1.01 - 19/11/19
Words:	66

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	56
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	378

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MEANS NOTHING dots

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i were a ring of my fallen king.
he was in battle, soul so shallow.
full of range, he has become.
full of range, hitting our son.
we were lovers full to all,
we were lovers through it all.

what has become of him now.
i do not know.
his soul follows me werever i go.
our son is hunted, scared of the DEAD...

Submitted on 2008-03-05 18:04:49 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like this one much more than the other one I read. I would still make some changes:

I wore the ring
of my fallen king.
he was in battle,
his soul so shallow.
full of rage,
he has become.
full of rage,
hitting our son
we were lovers
through it all.

what has become of him now.
I do not know.
his soul follows
me wherever I go.
our son is hunted,
And scared of a ghost...

thats just me.I liked it overall.
| Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]

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