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A King is Born

Author: 7makaveli
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 36 /43 /50
Words: 106
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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I honestly don't know what got into me...

A King is Born

Ashes fall as if from a burning cloud,
Makes the people scream out loud,
A king is born, young and proud,
His will, his strength, the sweat of his brow,
He glares at the ground and opens his mouth,
Destiny is my destination, I always come around,
They're telling me to slow it down,
But I can't do it now, I'm glowing now,
Your claim to glory is not in my category
I recite stories similar to biblical allegories,
Take it as a chain of gold, which is our bond,
Words could have been whispers, still remain strong,
Through this lyrical firestorm, a king is born...

Submitted on 2008-03-05 18:17:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Okay I recited that in whispering it was a good scheme. 4.5stars You could have made this a sonnet for more effect.I like it.You said you dont know wut got into you, maybe something good for the grace and sake of this should think about that for a while. RG
| Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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