Runaway Soul by TheStillSilence

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Submission Name: Runaway Soul dots

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Author:	TheStillSilence
ASL Info:	16/f/eye of the tornado
Elite Ratio:	5.46 - 156/75/29
Words:	93

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	90
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	640

Description:
Interpret it as you wish...

Runaway Soul dots

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Raving upon, the ashes of darkness;
Not unto light, dare those feet step.
Clutch the ribs of loneliness; do not falter;
Stand guard, little soldier, never forget.

Mirrors only show, the attributes of skinlines,
Transparency dances, but you run away.
Swallowing the breathes; never let them see light;
Hide within mirrors: maybe transparency will fade.

Empty shells only, hold tougher membranes;
Throw away spirit, matter and soul.
Maybe one day you’ll breathe, and I’ll see your breath quiver;
Maybe then ashes, can arise and be whole.

Submitted on 2008-03-05 18:41:45 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is the feeling i get from this : someone who is afraid to show the true, the real, them. They cling to transparency and "hide in mirrors" in superficial reflections of what is expected of them. I love the line " stand guard little soldier, never forget." It again goes with the idea of guarding your true feelings.
I'm not sure if that's the meaning you intended- at times I was a little confused, but that's just probably because it's beyond me. I'm not sure what the line " transparency dances, but you run away" means.
But I love the imagery and description. Thanks.
| Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by bananafish | [ Reply to This ]
  I think I get this... It is very interesting how you use so many images... These images give a interesting picture of one who traps themselves in darkness, fearing the light, and feels insignificant, as if they are unworthy of the light.

| Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
  It is hard to know what you are talking about because you use so many different images. but i like the way the ending makes me feel...

Maybe one day you’ll breathe, and I’ll see your breath quiver;
Maybe then ashes, can arise and be whole.

It feels hopeful yet final, like saying then I will I understand it all and the questions won't torment me anymore...

Well i might not even be close to what you intended, but thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by ashik | [ Reply to This ]

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