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    dots Submission Name: Runaway Souldots

    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsRunaway Souldots

    Raving upon, the ashes of darkness;
    Not unto light, dare those feet step.
    Clutch the ribs of loneliness; do not falter;
    Stand guard, little soldier, never forget.

    Mirrors only show, the attributes of skinlines,
    Transparency dances, but you run away.
    Swallowing the breathes; never let them see light;
    Hide within mirrors: maybe transparency will fade.

    Empty shells only, hold tougher membranes;
    Throw away spirit, matter and soul.
    Maybe one day youíll breathe, and Iíll see your breath quiver;
    Maybe then ashes, can arise and be whole.

    Submitted on 2008-03-05 18:41:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is the feeling i get from this : someone who is afraid to show the true, the real, them. They cling to transparency and "hide in mirrors" in superficial reflections of what is expected of them. I love the line " stand guard little soldier, never forget." It again goes with the idea of guarding your true feelings.
    I'm not sure if that's the meaning you intended- at times I was a little confused, but that's just probably because it's beyond me. I'm not sure what the line " transparency dances, but you run away" means.
    But I love the imagery and description. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by bananafish | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I get this... It is very interesting how you use so many images... These images give a interesting picture of one who traps themselves in darkness, fearing the light, and feels insignificant, as if they are unworthy of the light.
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      It is hard to know what you are talking about because you use so many different images. but i like the way the ending makes me feel...

    Maybe one day youíll breathe, and Iíll see your breath quiver;
    Maybe then ashes, can arise and be whole.

    It feels hopeful yet final, like saying then I will I understand it all and the questions won't torment me anymore...

    Well i might not even be close to what you intended, but thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by ashik | [ Reply to This ]

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