Description: "All that is necessary to break the spell of inertia and frustration is this: Act as if it were impossible to fail. That is the talisman, te formula, the command of right about face which turns us from failure towards success." Dorothea Brande
Suspended in NOW -------------------------------------------
Suspended in NOWFeel meAll particles of BEINgI AM body,Soul,Wind,Terra,Water,GraceAll reflectionsALight A face ~I AM movingstillnessAPeaceIn ownershipA Lifenot a lease
I'd have to say this poem has a lot of inertia. I love the way all the words run together. Their momentum caused them all to run into each other, heh.
Very natural and spiritual. I too get in this mood occasionally where I suddenly feel like everything and yet nothing. Often happens when I'm listening to progressive/psychedelic rock. Just sit back and explode.
Existential, man.
Also, the line "Feel meAll particles of BEINg" is super cool. That should be in a song. I just love that line.
Wow, I'm not exactly sure of what to think of this. I was very umm interesting. A good write I would say but it was different and I like that. Uniqueness is hard to find these days. The only thing I didn't like was the fact that it was so hard to read. Keep up the good work an dI'll keep reading.
Tif,
This is the second time I've tried to comment to this..I timed out the first because I got interrupted.
The disreguard for all rules works for this subject, but would not work for others. you've cleverly divided phases with your use of CAPS yet they do not seem all important in the scheme of things. This is zen.
I really like the phrases"movingstillness" and "APeaceIn ownership" The first illustrates and inner peace and quietness while the second indicates that it is something strived for not given and taken for granted.
Submission Name: Suspended in NOW
