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    dots Submission Name: [.I.Love.You.]dots
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    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 619
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 715



    Description:
       i wrote this march 4th & 5th it took me a lil longer to get everything just how i wanted it to make it feel complete. i honestly think this is my best peice of work i have ever written.. WHAT DO YOU THING?!


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    dots[.I.Love.You.]dots
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    I could spend forever in your arms,
    & eternity in your eyes!
    All I need is you,
    Right by my side!

    Together we'll stand,
    Together we'll fall,
    Together forever,
    No matter the cost!

    The distance between us,
    Is nothing but time!
    And no matter what,
    You'll always be mine!

    I've loved you from the beginning,
    And I'll love you till the end,
    Frank your not only my boyfriend,
    Your also like my bestfriend!

    I love you so much,
    I only wish I could explain,
    I'll do anything for you,
    For you are my everything!





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    ||| Comments |||
      this is an awsome poem...i can relate(a little). i think that you page journal is also so tue...no matter what.. i try to keep moveing forward. im like the person, in the entie school who people feel they just MUST pic on...i was always depressed. and thinking of 'thing's to make it all go away(the pain inside). but resintley iv been trying to ignore. things turn out better for everyone when i just 'dont take afence'...

    GOOD JOB!!!
    | Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by being me | [ Reply to This ]


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