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    dots Submission Name: you had your chancedots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 584
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 945



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       i just wrote this because i feel that my heart was totally ripped into shreds by someone who i thought was supposed to be my best guy friend lies to me. (severely)


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    dotsyou had your chancedots
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    You had your chance.
    But you blew it.
    You had my heart in your hands.
    And you just let it bleed.

    As i remember the past.
    I see why
    That it never did last.
    Yes I'm broken hearted.
    And the tears streamed down my face.
    But this broken heart still continues to beat.

    I cried out loud.
    And I scream and shout.
    But you'll never see this.
    The weaker side of my love and hate.

    I won't stand for
    Your lies and deceit.
    The trust is out the door.
    Cause i won't repeat.
    Like a broken record anymore.

    You had your chance.
    But you blew it.
    You had my heart in your hands.
    And you just let it bleed.

    Don't play it.
    Like your the victim.
    You know what you started.
    And you know you left me broken hearted.




    Submitted on 2008-03-06 16:54:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      There's always a 2nd chance and a new love to find somewhere out there in this debris. keep writing and sing it in YouTube.
    | Posted on 2010-11-26 00:00:00 | by Apteryx | [ Reply to This ]
      I totally get this. awesome write.
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      I know how this feels. I'm so sorry if you have gone through this.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think i commented on this on on ur myspace place. but wow this one really has some strong parts

    "But you'll never see this.
    The weaker side of my love and hate." best lines WOOt Woot
    | Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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