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    dots Submission Name: The Family Resemblance dots

    Author: Ettenna Izus
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 11/9/14
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    dotsThe Family Resemblance dots

    She sits smugly in her grey-blue corduroy chair,
    one dead leg swung over the other, veined and hanging
    like a map wedged in a car door.
    She coughs another snively, snotty cough,
    indignant with suspended snot and reaching Ė
    she takes another gulping sip of her chocolate milk.
    The powderís separating and tumbling down the tall glass
    and reminds me of particles suspended in packed snow,
    the soil thatís worn in, speckled like blemishes
    on the face of a beauty.

    She asks how Iíve been
    like any decent human would,
    and what can I say?
    She canít help that every dimension of her being offends me.

    Iíve been busy, I say.

    She can relate.

    I bet she can.

    What does that mean?

    It doesnít mean anything,
    and for once Iím not being sarcastic.

    Another too close, too long, desperate embrace,
    she misses me, girl,
    as she situates herself deeper
    into the visible pores of my skin and new veins
    appearing daily along my winter-white legs.

    Submitted on 2008-03-06 20:13:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Sisters or Mother and Daughter. This seems so very dry and cynical but still like you care about the other person. There is this hint of reluctant acceptance in the becoming of this other person, but also a revulsion to the way they seem to want to be close to you. I think that there are many people and families like this, so it is something a lot of us can relate to, and you told this piece with a frankness that is admirable. You have a lovely talent here.

    I really enjoyed this

    | Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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