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    dots Submission Name: The Difference in Perspective dots
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    Author: Ettenna Izus
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 11/9/14
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 170
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    In the cold it’s hard to tell what’s steam and what’s smoke.
    I can see the stuff leaving his lips, same as always,
    drifting upward like the hands of a clock at noon,
    thin and stringy like a broken spider web,
    shivering and swaying in the sharp breeze.

    That cylinder like chalk candy is perched between his fingers,
    the same way a child holds another’s hand.
    Higher the cloud floats like stacks spit up by nuclear power plants,
    like storm clouds and fog, like the spread of blood in water.

    But I see the happy white camp-fire drizzle and miss
    those lazy summers where he lit a match and sparked my imagination.
    Or I see the pillowy bunches he breathed out of the chimney at Christmas.
    I see it leaving my lips, and floating up amongst all the other stuff
    And it’s an inert thing, a frivolous thing, something I can live with,
    And not at all the thing that killed him.




    Submitted on 2008-03-06 20:19:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am not sure what to say to this particular piece. It is haunting and beautiful and just a touch funny. This made me think of watching a lover smoke, the way the tendrils will curl around the air and float there, especially in warm golden beams of light in the late afternoon. You captured an element in this that brings this piece both humor and a more serious, dramatic side. I compliment you for that.

    A very lovely piece
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-03-07 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]



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