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    dots Submission Name: Liesdots
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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 782
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 595



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    dotsLiesdots
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    You say you love me
    I can't believe I actually believed you
    You have been lieing to me all along
    You said at first you had no girlfriend
    Then after I thought I might actually like you
    You said you do have a girlfriend
    But that you still love me
    How can you fucking lie to my face
    And say you still love me?
    Have you forsaken me?
    I believe you have
    Onegai, please
    No more lies
    Tell me the truth from now on
    Lo siento, I am sorry
    It will take you awhile
    To re-gain
    My trust




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      This was really heart felt and truthful. I really liked this. This is pretty much my life story. You think I'd learn my lesson by now, but it seems as if my heart refuses to.

    Besides from the one spelling mistake (lieing is supposed to be lying), it was good. I have no idea what "Onegai" and "Lo siento" means (I don't speak spanish to well), but I was able to still get what the poem is about.

    Nice Write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I'm sorry to see what happened, and no mater what happens, you'll alwys have me here to take care of you Koneko, and that's a promise I will always keep. *hugs you tightly* You know where to find me if you ever need anything or anyone to talk to.
    | Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by Aion Kiori | [ Reply to This ]
      Leeme guess. this poem is for tu corazon? he is an ass. i will kick his ass for lieing to you. i cant believe what he did to you and those other girls. why did you elieve that damned puto? are you loca chika? ugh....porque estoy encantan tu?........hn.


    -Aaron
    | Posted on 2008-03-06 00:00:00 | by PrinceOfEvil666 | [ Reply to This ]


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