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    dots Submission Name: somewhere in the blackdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    love is a frightful rock
    but stones can be broken.
    & these bones are my token
    to a better life.

    the human drama
    slides off me
    like the moss of the lake.

    the earth is ancient
    in me
    & its heat
    is the palm
    of my eye.

    i take these arms
    & stretch them through the sky
    & i am moving through dreams
    like the wolf of the snow.
    the sweetest meat
    is around the claws.

    you glow brightly
    in the mists my sleep.
    the edge of the whole world
    is browning around me.

    somewhere in the black
    there are peices of the heart
    that broke through the ice.

    i am frozen
    in stark new beginnings.




    Submitted on 2008-03-07 00:01:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem. It made me feel like I was a part of nature with all of the references. The imgaery was lovely, and the analogies. I think it would have read better with the word and written out at the beginning of those lines. Though the & gave it an interesting look.
    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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