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    Author: Swimming Bird
    ASL Info:    31/m/AR
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 92/90/27
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I feel sorrow, scarred, and numb.
    I hurt so much I'm sane.
    I haven't cried in years,
    But that don't take away the pain.

    Though my spirit's whole, I'm broken.
    Though the cut's not mine, I bleed.
    Though I beg and plead for it to stop,
    Never does it heed.

    It thrusts upon me all your pain,
    All the things you suffer.
    Everything that makes you cry,
    Afflicts me like no other.

    This empathy, of which I'm cursed,
    Will not leave me alone.
    It will always cut me to the soul,
    Until I turn to stone.

    But how do I live with this pain?
    Whatever helps me cope?
    It shares with me your joy as well.
    And that, in turn, gives hope.




    Submitted on 2008-03-07 08:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, i have never read a poem that describes me so well lol!
    I have been writing a poem about empathy and its just not coming out so well. but anyway i loved this and its definatly going on my favs.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-06-26 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      i apsolutely love this poem...it going on my favs...great job...and it turns out so sweet at the end....great job..........
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]
      :(

    Yes, that is a sad face, and not because it was a bad poem. This is a brilliant poem because I feel it everyday. I especially love this stanza:

    Though my spirit's whole, I'm broken.
    Though the cut's not mine, I bleed.
    Though I beg and plead for it to stop,
    Never does it heed.

    The thing is that I always feel exactly that way...its hard to even say to what extent but I feel like I am thrusting it on people everyday and by people...I mean you.

    I am sorry if I ever made you endure such pain which can never be described in adequate terms. I shouldnt be doing this...its not fair.

    And if this poem is not about me well then...i guess I just made a fool of myself because I did feel sorta priviledged what with being inspiration for a poem and what not.

    Even if its depressing :(

    So yeah, amazing poem per usual. And I am sorry for everything I thrust on you. Dont bleed too much, and remember to live your own life, not just through me, because I know there are some tears in you if you look hard enough. If not then I might just have to add yours to my list. The list of people I cry for everyday...do you think you are worth it?

    <3
    | Posted on 2008-03-08 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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