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    dots Submission Name: Mysteriarch dots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 624
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       Mysteriarch--one who presides over mysteries.


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    The hill is long where now I slide
    Against the wind, across the grass,
    While, light as air, at dusk I ride,
    To where the elementals hide
    Beneath this haunted lake like glass.

    With effort whippoorwills may shake
    My fast pursuit above the elms
    For I can rocks and mountains break,
    Or cause the rolling plains to quake,
    For I control enchanted realms.

    At dawn I may with soldiers hike
    On narrow trails that have no end,
    Or drive a rusted iron spike
    Into an overburdened dike
    And waiting walls of water send.

    Back up my hill whose sides are steep
    I can produce the saddest sigh,
    All lovers champion and keep
    Here with me in a fitful sleep,
    Beneath this haunted satin sky.

    The hill is long where now I slide
    Against the wind, across the grass,
    While, light as air, at dusk I ride,
    To where the elementals hide
    Beneath this haunted lake like glass.




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      What a beautiful personification of mystery. This was incredibly well written. The imagery was fantastic. I very much enjoyed the haunted satin sky. The blend of fantasy and realism made a very good and easily pictures mesh. You did great overall with this, I really don't have a critique, I just felt I should leave some form of comment on this, being as I just added it to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      "One who presides over mysteries"!!! What a powerful muse this represents! The subject is so infinite it boggles the mind! This is a delightful subject and story, and you have written it with genius!

    "Back up my hill whose sides are steep
    I can produce the saddest sigh,
    All lovers champion and keep
    Here with me in a fitful sleep,
    Beneath this haunted satin sky."

    At least he knows what they won't tell!

    Delightful story and poem!

    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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