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    dots Submission Name: the ocean of it alldots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 459
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsthe ocean of it alldots
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    the blood of the mute sky
    is amongst me.
    last night,
    i clawed at the insides
    of my own sleep.

    my dreams seem like you
    in this way,
    more prone to the nightmare
    of knowing
    what home is
    & having lost that creature
    somehow.

    i can't feel the cold sometimes
    as it competes with my flesh.
    the ice of my body
    thaws in thought.

    i will not be possessed
    by the passion of death
    when in life
    i am a miracle.

    i have seen
    the skeletons of us all
    & i leave them there,
    unburied in the midday sun
    for bleaching.

    i've been loosening my own bones
    for the sake of love
    & in my own heart,
    i'm moving into the ocean of it all.




    Submitted on 2008-03-07 18:07:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      not at all what I expected by the title, but then you seem a bit unpredictable. I think that the "Blood of the mute sky" is a very intriguing and creative line, but my favorite part is the fourth stanza.
    this is a very lovely piece.

    peace
    Maddie
    | Posted on 2008-05-09 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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