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    dots Submission Name: I need youdots
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    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1046
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    dotsI need youdots
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    Joy seeps through me
    As i see your eyes
    With your touch of tenderness
    Comes pleasure in pure form
    I'd never question
    That you adore me
    that you feel love for me
    That when i'm gone you'll miss me
    And that you'll always be there
    With you kiss
    Comes a world so perfect
    So beautiful and purely peaceful
    And in your arms
    Fear, cold, and insecurity
    Disappear from my emotions
    In your prescence
    I feel safety
    Confidence is not a queer feeling
    I have no concern for anything
    It's just a fact
    I need you






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      I remember feeling this way many a time. This has a message poplecan relate to, know exactly how you feel. Very mature write fir your age. You've got talent. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting write...I must say your pretty good, in this part: "With you kiss" I guess you meant with your kiss, but whatever spelling isn't much of a problem as long as you get your point through...I can perfectly relate with what your saying, and by the poem you seem more mature than your real age :P...awesome write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-29 00:00:00 | by nj | [ Reply to This ]
      i wish it was written for me
    a amazing improvement cud be seen in the way u have written it... only thing that it may miss is perhaps a background music...wonderful song honey and keep it coming
    bye
    | Posted on 2004-07-02 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i love this poem. it makes me think of my ex. its sad (when i think of him) ur poem makes me go back to memories that we shared. and i thank you. ur poesm amazing keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by natasha | [ Reply to This ]


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