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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 11/30/55
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 100
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 923



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       do i ever know what to say about the stuff i write?


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    Your being quiet but ya got me start'n a riot. Can you take this hurt feeling away from me? I'm ask'n nicely for you to call on me... will you fall with me? blind smile, grinning eyes. It seems like a disguise. Get out of line, arnt you sick of try'n? I know yor cry'n the look ya give me makes me feel like die'n. Are you ok? i ask almost everyday. fear'n to write what i feel in case it changes and is too real. Protecting myself, building walls, sitting on fences. I'm not taking any chances.

    Getting harder to think, to create and imitate what i see; i don't know what to be. Turn'n to you for some direction and protection. Confused and feel'n like some abused dog. Lost in the fog of dreams, running from myself. Tell me what's right and wrong, I'm sing'n a sad song. I care enough? I can't see what seems to be. help me?




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