you're just another statistic

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you're just another statistic

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The whirlwind grew; moving stealthily like a doctor pushing in a needle into your vein Tension rose causing unsettling emotions swirling into the summit of a tumult conscious of the pain; weary of it all. I doubt, we could fly or soar high to the leaded night... Of hopes and dreams it couldn't and wouldn't last, all vanquished into a black morose ash.

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