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    dots Submission Name: you're just another statisticdots
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    Author: D-Ink
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 81/59/58
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsyou're just another statisticdots
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    The whirlwind grew;
    moving stealthily like a doctor
    pushing in a needle into your vein
    Tension rose
    causing unsettling emotions
    swirling into the summit of a tumult
    conscious of the pain;
    weary of it all.
    I doubt, we could fly
    or soar high to the leaded night...
    Of hopes and dreams
    it couldn't and wouldn't last,
    all vanquished into a
    black morose ash.




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