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you're just another statistic

Author: D-Ink
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Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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you're just another statistic

The whirlwind grew;
moving stealthily like a doctor
pushing in a needle into your vein
Tension rose
causing unsettling emotions
swirling into the summit of a tumult
conscious of the pain;
weary of it all.
I doubt, we could fly
or soar high to the leaded night...
Of hopes and dreams
it couldn't and wouldn't last,
all vanquished into a
black morose ash.

Submitted on 2008-03-08 04:01:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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