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    dots Submission Name: With All My Souldots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    19/F/International
    Elite Ratio:    7.36 - 776/739/286
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 88
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       I don't really have words for this one. Sometimes giving all your love to someone is all it takes to keep them alive.


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    dotsWith All My Souldots
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    Do not leave me with this sorrow
    That has bestowed upon this night.
    I refuse to let you die in my arms
    Helpless to heal the wounds inflicted.
    I’d rather throw away your pain
    Telling you all will be well again.

    But you smile with a sarcastic laugh
    Forcing your hand to hold my cheek
    Just to feel for one more moment
    The warmth of my devotion for you
    And I can’t help but shed a few tears
    Knowing I am indeed helpless to heal.

    My weakness never bothered you
    Even for the sake of us staying strong
    Whilst I was shattered in all directions
    As to how I am to accept your death
    You never loosened my shaking hand
    As if to appreciate what you still had.

    And just before your last breath
    You whispered words I’d never forget
    “I love you with all my soul”
    I couldn’t imagine how I lost you
    How one minute you were with me;
    I cannot release you from my arms.

    It’s been a while now since you left
    You’re too far away for me to reach
    I keep holding myself together
    To prevent my world from falling apart
    Because you wouldn’t want me to
    Your love is what keeps me strong.




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      You reminded me of when my daughter was 15, and was helping the younger kids in a bus excursion. The bus hit a little girl called Angela, who died while my daughter was holding her, a few minutes later. Those two hardly knew each other, but she remembers Angela like a lost sister. She's 32 now, and quite recently I heard her talking about Angela, very much in the way this poem expresses. Her shock at being involved in an accident with a death, was much quicker resolved than the loss of this friend she was only intimate with for a few minutes. That's the part she will never forget.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      A beautiful rendition of love in the most trying and helpless situation we humans shall ever experience.
    My wife went into the Heavens on Dec.25,2007.
    the only thing that keeps me from falling apart is my church's teaching on The Communion of Saints. After death, life is at its fullest and there are our loved ones helping God to keep our feet from stumbling and our hearts from losing trust.
    | Posted on 2008-03-08 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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