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    dots Submission Name: I Seedots
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    Author: forfila
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    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI Seedots
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    I see a heart still in time
    A young heart in a family environment, who was always treated right

    I never see an effort when you smile
    When it is reaction to try and reach and hold you, that is why
    Yet, only so we may combine, learn and grow from each other
    Be caught in forever, living the fireworks of destined lovers

    Affection is for the closest moments
    When you say something to blow my mind
    Right when we both understand that, this is why

    I wish it were spring time, with new life
    Never too hot
    Nor cold
    Always just right
    A whole stage just for us
    To explore the realms of mind
    To learn of all the energies of the spirit.




    Submitted on 2008-03-09 04:25:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wistful, winsome, and absolutely delightful!

    "A whole stage just for us
    To explore the realms of mind
    To learn of all the energies of the spirit."

    And together you shall!!

    Bravo!




    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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