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    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    20 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 215/98/41
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 150
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1380



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       Maybe I'M the real Slim Shady...

    but probably not.


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    dotsRole Modeldots
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    For the sake of vanity, beauty lies insane.
    Another laceration lines flesh like cocaine,
    creating amazing new ways to entertain
    the foggy mirror that reflects each tangled vein.

    Every night, my razor hits a rosary.
    Don't you want to grow up to be just like me?


    Empty pill bottles roll around this wooden floor
    while taped childish posters rip paint from the door,
    and frenetic without medication once more,
    I follow the same steep path I've taken before.

    Insomnia claims my neurotic debris.
    Don't you want to grow up to be just like me?


    They're only bodies disguising the taste of sin.
    Iron falls from my mouth, dripping down to my chin.
    Necrophilia's irresistibility's grin
    conquers from the corner of the morgue that I'm in.

    It's acceptable if the carcass is free.
    Don't you want to grow up to be just like me?


    Bitter eyes spin fantasies of deliverance,
    which is nonexistent without breaking this trance.
    Love's hypnotic, erotic, chaotic last dance
    birthed a vile, unhealthy, obsessive romance.

    I hallucinate shadows hung from a tree...
    Don't you want to grow up to be just like me?




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      Does it make you feel alive to know that other people who read your work 'enjoy' the fact that you are falling to pieces with no Hope?

    I find it strange that they sing your praises and walk away so cavalier when you've poured out the truth of a desperate situation needing help.

    Maybe I'm just uptight, but you are sending out a message that has two faces. One smiles for the compliments and the other screams into the distance as your 'fans' walk away and says, "Can't you see I'm dying inside!?!"

    I won't mock you with a compliment.

    Tom
    | Posted on 2008-05-24 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      You, dear Nikkki are THE real Slim Shady...

    Someday when I grow up, I want to be just like you ;)

    While as always your words, lines and rhythym hit and well...smack me in such the perfect way and I do like every bit of this, THESE lines are really kicking:
    "For the sake of vanity, beauty lies insane"
    "Every night, my razor hits a rosary"
    "Insomnia claims my neurotic debris"
    "They're only bodies disguising the taste of sin"

    Spectacular Nikkki - I would say more, but I do believe I have exhausted my complimentary words with your works...BUT IT'S AWESOME
    You have a knack for the phrases that penetrate deep into my psyche...and that is a most hard place to get to in me ;)
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Perdy twisted there Nikkki reminds me of somthing that Liminetity whatever whatever Snicket guy would say. Never seen that movie but it reminds me of something that dude would say. Yet again perhaps it was Shrek on those anti high anxiety pills angry cuz he wasnt as stong as that green Hulk dude or perhaps pissed of because some leprechaun stole his amazon girlfriend from him.

    Dont upset a leprechaun, ok?

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the fact that you can laugh at yourself even when you are making a serious statement. You know what razorblades and prescription pills and all I want to be just like you when I grow up. Ok except male and...wait aren't you like a year younger than me. Damn there go my chances.

    Guess I'm stuck,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow you definetly have a way with words. I love the twistedness and the creepy feeling of this poem. Very nice.

    Cry
    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]



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