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    dots Submission Name: Heart Songdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 440
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       love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif


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    dotsHeart Songdots
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    Music takin me back
    to my Indian roots
    Runnin buck naked
    barefeet - no shoes

    When nature was respected
    We called our brother Moon
    Child Howlin in the wind
    half past Harvest soon

    Strollin with the river
    tepee by the lapping shore
    i couldn't want for anything
    nothin i need more

    Thanking all the animals
    on ground and in the sky
    There is no truth i am
    lacking
    No need to question
    Why
    I'm sitting with my
    King
    Underneath a clear
    blue sky




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      I was raised in the out of doors on a grain and cattle ranch, and I love poems about nature. Your poem delightfully entails a love of and respect for nature, and describes a beautiful "oneness" with the great spirit of the land and nature! Well done, Tiffany!
    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      "I'm sitting with my King"

    Hmm...seems familiar. Could that be me in your poem?

    Wonderful, tiff, wonderful. You always make nature take root in your readers' hearts. I feel a tree inside me right now.

    I'm currently playing a game called "Innocent Life: A Futuristic Harvest Moon". If you haven't heard of the Harvest Moon series, its a series of games where you are a farmer and you grow crops and take care of your farm and whatnot.

    This game continues the series, only it seems to have more purpose to it than the other ones. It takes place in the Future on Heartflame Island. The land is becoming less fertile due to the robotic autofarming. The spirits of the island are angry and they are threatening to erupt the volcano on the island unless action is taken. In the game you play an android boy who's purpose is to farm in the traditional method in order to save the island.

    I just love it (I'm a fan of Harvest Moon games), and I love the whole idea of it. And it seems a nice coincidence you wrote this while I am playing the game.

    Keep on loving nature, tiff. Thanks for helping me to appreciate it even more.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish I were right there with you, really I do.
    Another beautiful write from you, you always manage to take my mind to that special place, and for that, I thank you Tiff!!



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    | Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this Tiff, most of yours I do. But there is more about you here than we knew before and I like the portrait.
    It makes me want to go worship naked in the woods.
    I think in the first stophe you can use barefoot, it seems to sound better even if the grammar isn't correct.
    after all you're Native American and it seems more authentic to the earthy tone of the poem. I love to get down in the chlorophyll, hehe!

    Just beautiful, it makes me feel satisfied and whole, thanks for sharing.

    Love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Tif,
    This is almost lyrical. I hear it almost like a verse and chorus..or maybe thats my musical muse reawakening..lol. The title is apropriate for the sound and rythm of the poem. I liked the way you fractured our common phrases to produce wonderful "hooks" esp. "half past Harvest soon".

    jan
    | Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      How wonderful that you have some Indian heritage! It shows in your respect for nature. Did you mean 'Harvest' in line 8 and 'lacking' in line 16?

    "No need to question
    Why
    I'm sitting with my
    King
    Underneath a clear
    blue sky"

    Beautiful lines!

    :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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