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The key


Author: N0shin
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Words: 166
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The key



Not much to do where I'm at;
Nothing much to say.
There aint enough places to run away;
I won't see you passing by someday.
There just ain't many grey feathers to trace.
I climb and climb
till i reach to that cloud number nine.
Finding you
Bringing you
Just to learn how the height scares you.
So once again you make me fall.
Then I know I only dream
while you have gone a long way.
I won't be trying to reach out,
I wont be flying high.
Because you know I can not.
Becaue i know i can not.
There won't be lines on your face.
You must not worry at all.
There'll be another love
Another life for you
In a few days.
I won't be trying to find you
I won't be calling out your name anymore;
I might only cry
And break inside.
But you need not know.
The doors must remain closed.
But baby the key is not lost.




Submitted on 2008-03-09 22:35:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like the poetry and everything about it....but i didnot get the message...

in the end for some reason it was kinda saddening...
"In a few days.
I won't be trying to find you
I won't be calling out your name anymore;
I might only cry
And break inside.
But you need not know.
The doors must remain closed.
But baby the key is not lost."

-another good one!
keep 'em coming
| Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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