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    dots Submission Name: A HAPPY BIRTHDAYdots

    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA HAPPY BIRTHDAYdots

    This story that is being weaved as time goes by
    Is 'bout e'body but it a'int ever 'bout me
    Its 'bout how e'body feels and how e'body sees
    This small plankton in the sea- this plankton is me!

    Sometimes I feel like no matter what I do
    Or what I say- or what I feel;
    I am ALWAYS the one who is wrong-
    I now feel like never again can i do any thing right!
    Can never turn and hope for a hopeful sight!

    I misunderstand others...I overreact...and I know I do it all!
    But do I actually do these things...or are people getting me wrong?!
    Damn! I wish the ones who get me wrong were PEOPLE...
    But they are the most closest ones...PEOPLE that i value more than myself!

    Hey...whatever is right is right and the wrong is wrong!
    I know this and I wont retort to all that everybody has to say...
    But this : "I feel the way I feel and nothing can change this"...
    These feelings shall, in my system, ALWAYS stay!

    Submitted on 2008-03-10 16:29:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Babes...u r so cute when u r wrong!
    I love u...im sorry all of us put u through so much...but u r the most wonderful guy on earth...this is why u get hurt so easily cos u never hurt anyone...u r the best(K)(K)(K)(K)(K)K)(K)(K)(K)(K)(K)(K)(K)(K)(K)...and on...and on...and on...lol...
    i love u...happy birthday is a sad poetry...
    but cheer up....pls do:D
    | Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]
      Everyone gets impressions from another's expressions, it is a pain to fake a good impression to give them a good impression based on their character. I suppose you are setting your frustration in writing, in that case, well done.
    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by Razorain | [ Reply to This ]

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