I read this as a Euro-rap/technotronic song... I did not mean to- but I was listening to one and it sort of happened... IT WORKED, though! How kewl is THAT?
"and you never asked me if my wounds had healed beneath these shabby band-aids he's placed on them"
Kick-@$$ line, for sure!
You did a great job penning this out... Did you mean to have the space in misprinted? Either way- you should do MORE to make that word "misprinted" to help emphasize the point with a punch...
it's almost like this piece is two halves that were put wrong. the beginning feels like it should be at the end and the end feels like if not be at the beginning but feels like the sentiments are stronger or came first; are just more important.
i really relate to this, as clichéd as that phrase has become 'round these parts. it's certainly something to want and need someone who doesn't feel the same way, to try and find some other solace and love, only to be terribly wrong and then finding yourself needing and wanting more than ever the original object of torment and affection with more wounds and aching than you started with. that's certainly my life at the moment.
and how wonderful it is to see such heartbreak expressed so poignantly? great word choice and rhythm and your line breaks serve to highlight the brokenness within and the power of the words standing alone. great work.
Submission Name: you'll find me
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