Wish I could be this kind of inspiration! Damn... Good job!
I think the parenthesis work in each stanza! There is plenty of context here- "I’d walk the miles between us" although, I DO think another 3 or 4 line stanza could be added somewhere in the middle to just give it a little extra *umphh!!!*
If you got REALLY pissed off and went back and put some vile and venom in this- I would love to re-read THAT submission... A dash or pain-pepper never hurt anyone.
Okay, so i'd like to let you know i noticed the poem within the poem in the parentheses, i like this effect, very creative. i've seen it before and it's always intrigued me. i should try it some time....i have, actually, i think, but didn't like the way it turned out.
Anyway, so yes, the parenths ARE necessary.
However, in the second stanza....the bit in the parenths doesnt really....FIT...it seems very out of place. i dont know if you could reword it to where it fits in both aspects of the poem but i definitely think you could =]
Also, in the first and third stanzas, you have a space between your last word and the closing parenth, and in the secind stanza you have a space between the opening parenth and your first word. it is somewhat distracting, like the spacing issue that Suzi called to attention..
Read Jeff's poem and took something totally different away from yours but that's the way of inspritation.
I liked the overall feel of this. It's more longing than bitter, but I think you could drop the parenthasis. If you use them more than once or twice they become a habit not a need for your writing. This is just a nitpic because there is not really much else that needs to be changed.