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Submission Name:
My Dear Friend Risk
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Author:
Razorain
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3.33 - 24/24/9
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40
Class/Type:
Poetry/Misc
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** Visualize **
:: Me and me, eye to eye ::
My Dear Friend Risk
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Endlessly doubtlessly rushing
And yet in it still goes gushing
Feet, both stuffed tight and wet
Fleeting hands balancing the bet
Limits seen in a glimpse
Little one with four limbs
Nevertheless attempts were made
Ever persistent until safe
Submitted on 2008-03-11 05:08:22
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I really don't like the way the first stanza rhymes to neatly, and in the second, poof. Also, the last two lines, not sure what you are driving at there.
| Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by
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