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    dots Submission Name: my flaw...dots

    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 502
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    dotsmy flaw...dots

    help me so shamelessly
    as i sit here in the dark
    slitting my once so virgin flesh
    tainted by my imperfection
    loved by none
    my only love
    under six feet of earth
    this rose i hold
    pale and weak
    a thorn pierces the skin
    not a surface wound
    as you would like
    its through my soul
    cold and lonly
    waiting for her
    she'll never return
    never to touch again
    no last words
    shes gone
    my loving mother taken
    such a forsaken greed
    there is none
    i say to you
    words undeniable
    your jesus
    a wolf in sheeps clothing
    he punishes his children
    they do no wrong
    unconditional love destroyed
    in my shell i wait
    to drive this knife
    through my viens
    eating my own deceptions
    in this after life
    my flaw...

    Submitted on 2008-03-11 07:45:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This comes across awfully bitter. I would like it more if you explored the details a little better. It is a lengthy write to state simply that you lost a loved one and cut yourself. What about this made you feel that way toward God? Why does the cutting help? When did she leave, how, how did you feel afterword? Just a few thoughts.
    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]

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