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    dots Submission Name: Daredots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 70
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 963



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    Stand tall, back straight, arms at your side.
    Stand proud, look forward
    Mentally prepare, don't let your mind wander

    A body before you,
    slowly pressing against your own.
    Breath upon your neck as hands slip down skin.
    Tracing the delicate lines,
    wanting so badly to grasp for more.
    Do you dare?

    An invitation is presented,
    you push and he pushes back,
    pinning your body beneath him,
    against the wall that seperates you from those on the outside.
    The world is gone, it's just you and him.
    Do you dare?

    Stare into eyes that hungerly search your own,
    decide now, right now.
    Pull away or let greed take over,
    greed that tires the body,
    douses flesh,
    ignites the mind.

    Inches away,
    hear the heart beat,
    the ultimate question lingers in the air,
    Do you dare?




    Submitted on 2008-03-11 12:12:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I actually think this is a great piece of work.
    It's formatted very clearly, words are great and in tact. Very descriptive. I love it!
    keep writing.
    -T
    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]


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