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    dots Submission Name: coma liesdots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    19/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 531/223/75
    Words: 457
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1915



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    dotscoma liesdots
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    I make color grotesque and morbid…

    …I make happiness seem obscene

    <Like a mob scene >

    I’ll give you just a moment to let it sink in…
    Now you’ve got it good cause I’m changing the rules again
    I’m changing my skin
    Again
    and Again
    I’m bored and I want you to change
    I’m ready to be caught off guard

    Come, come, come now can’t you do it anymore?

    I’m waiting and I hate waiting
    Let’s pull apart your wings and see what you’re made of
    Pick apart your insides and make them into a new set of outsides

    They talk to me about time with such respect
    I feel as though I know him personally
    care to shake his hand?
    People tell me how he changes and heals
    But you can’t fix what’s not broken
    Even he can’t change what’s inside me

    If only I played by his rules
    Not quite a lateral thinker, time is irrelevant to me

    If only it was drugs
    That you could take from me
    No, no, no, no, no this is much deeper
    *I’m chasing the color green*

    Can’t you feel it in the air?
    It’s so much more than air
    Once upon a time you knew what I meant
    Now it’s melted
    Like the snow
    Leaving
    Puddles
    Little reflecting pools
    With my answer at the bottom
    And you’ve closed your eyes to reading
    I’ve spelled it out
    A magic spell that only eyes can reveal

    I’m off to revel
    Behind my masks I am immortal
    A sweet sickness that draws you back to me





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      Well- I had no choice but to favorite this one... I mean, if I were to show you my favorite lines- I'd end up copy/pasting the entire fu<king poem, for sure...
    I'll give you an idea though: The first two lines are one Hel of a start. Make my stomach twist just reading- sets the entire tone for me... "I’ll give you just a moment to let it sink in…" makes you pause and eagerly await and at the same time dread...
    It's like how the people who are truly scary are not the ones who yell constantly- it's the ones who calmly whisper and never raise their voice. -Those are the ones who are ready to explode into violence. Not just all bluster and talk-
    "Pick apart your insides and make them into a new set of outsides"... An intestine suit with the heart now, literally, on the sleeve... You can see what one is made of, now...
    "Can’t you feel it in the air? It’s so much more than air..." and I can break this all down- but I already did in my head as I read it and, obviously, love it... It's right up my alley! (but then- I bet you already thought that.)

    *hugggs & drugggs*

    -Ceyx
    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]



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