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Author: N0shin
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Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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One more time you say nothing;
One more time I'll disappear
From nothingness
To nothingness.
Till I become a nobody.
Till your name echoes
Fading to infinity.
I take my turn
To lose my sanity.
Insanity is never hollow.
And at times you must follow;
The rules
The fire
The ice of green.
You're letting go;
Of me
Of love
Of sunshine beneath the ocean.
And you say
"What's done is done".
I need to creep out now.
Time for me to be gone.
Touch of sand;
Your shivering hand;
Feet on feet
You hurt my heart beat.
All those heat
Between our sheets;
Creating Nothingness
From Nothing.

Submitted on 2008-03-12 10:05:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The whole thing was cool except the line.....

"The ice of green."

What does that mean (smile)
Great write!!! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2008-05-03 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a sad poetry to me...and i dont know what to say about it...recently u just started writing poetry that is elusive TO me...and when i ask u what it truly means...u give me more riddles...well...keep writiting! i will keep reading...with PATIENCE!

| Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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