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perfect guy


Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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i have this amazing bf, whom i can only see on weekends because he works third shift :( and i miss him so much. but i know that he's the one for me!


perfect guy



I’m addicted to how you make me feel
You always make me feel so real
But now I’m lying in this empty bed
Staring at where you place your head
Wishing that you were with me tonight
When we’re together it feels so right
Now I never want to say goodbye
And I’ll love you till the day I die
Baby you were born to be my man
It’s all part of the big man’s plan
He knew I needed a man like you
To be there and help me pull through
You completely stole my heart
Our love is like a piece of art
It’s original in every single way
And we always put it on display
Everyone will know about you and I
They will know I got the perfect guy




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  Love it girl,, go and love your man, and make sure he loves you too..
| Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
  girl...i am in love as well and i have the perfect girl and i like you know that she is the one for me...i have to go with Razorain- drunken with love and i hope u dont get sober ;).
simply put and had a lot of cheery emotions that get transferred to the reader with ease!

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
:)>
-OB
| Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  Simple and straightforward as if drunken by love I suppose... Well written.
| Posted on 2008-03-12 00:00:00 | by Razorain | [ Reply to This ]


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