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    dots Submission Name: sipping soulsdots
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    Author: stasisindarknes
    ASL Info:    15/f/vt
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 23/28/27
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotssipping soulsdots
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    we sit out on the ledge
    drinking our thoughts
    sipping our souls
    and it was there all along
    the unattainable
    resides within our bodies
    from your seat on our ledge
    you lean over and whisper
    isn't it funny
    the places we searched
    and the time we spent there

    my laughter might just knock me over




    Submitted on 2008-03-12 21:49:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      her you go again just blowing me away i love it i really do sipping our souls come on you are really good
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      i' am very impressed. so much talent here and you are only 15... wow you know i would say i think u found your calling here. stick with it. and i personally i think this piece is perfect for music. and if you can sing anything like you can write then you r gonna be a star.. this one is defenitly going to my favs. keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      i' am very impressed. so much talent here and you are only 15... wow you know i would say i think u found your calling here. stick with it. and i personally i think this piece is perfect for music. and if you can sing anything like you can write then you r gonna be a star.. this one is defenitly going to my favs. keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. I would change two things. Put the things said in quotaton marks, and change the might in the last line to a may. Other than that, I thought this was wonderful. Especially the phrase sipping our souls. Good work. Hope to read more by you.
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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