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    dots Submission Name: Eternal Regretsdots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 36/42/46
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This one is about three different people taking their lives for their own reasons, haven't done much dark stuff lately...


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    dotsEternal Regretsdots
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    Is it time to walk away?
    I've heard the jeers, I've felt the pain
    This time I stay, amidst the decay
    Death's face, what else to say?
    Parked in limbo, am I eternally?
    Life or death? Chose regrettably

    Questing ambitiously, searching for self
    Knowledge is kept within this chest
    A play on words perhaps, at its best
    Smell of treasure through my breath?
    Where be the key? No regrets

    Good love is apples and flowers
    The other side, very cold showers
    I did see the sign, but I didn't stop
    Drunk by myself, wine bottles pop
    Temptation is so dreadful
    We should both be regretful




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      Great read , really enjoyed that . Think i liked the 3rd person you referred to the most , I guess becasue they kinda relate to me in some ways..but great work love the rhyme scheme aswell , well put together.cant wait to see some more. Btw i'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      I definitely am b/c this is on my mind everyday,Your good.Temptation should not be held against us eternally,not if God knew we were gonna pursue to it.But what the heck I dont know your beliefs but then again temptation should be put on us simply b/c were responsible for our own actions.5stars you did good,good enough for me.
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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