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Eternal Regrets

Author: 7makaveli
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Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This one is about three different people taking their lives for their own reasons, haven't done much dark stuff lately...

Eternal Regrets

Is it time to walk away?
I've heard the jeers, I've felt the pain
This time I stay, amidst the decay
Death's face, what else to say?
Parked in limbo, am I eternally?
Life or death? Chose regrettably

Questing ambitiously, searching for self
Knowledge is kept within this chest
A play on words perhaps, at its best
Smell of treasure through my breath?
Where be the key? No regrets

Good love is apples and flowers
The other side, very cold showers
I did see the sign, but I didn't stop
Drunk by myself, wine bottles pop
Temptation is so dreadful
We should both be regretful

Submitted on 2008-03-13 01:07:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great read , really enjoyed that . Think i liked the 3rd person you referred to the most , I guess becasue they kinda relate to me in some ways..but great work love the rhyme scheme aswell , well put together.cant wait to see some more. Btw i'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
| Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
  I definitely am b/c this is on my mind everyday,Your good.Temptation should not be held against us eternally,not if God knew we were gonna pursue to it.But what the heck I dont know your beliefs but then again temptation should be put on us simply b/c were responsible for our own actions.5stars you did good,good enough for me.
| Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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