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    dots Submission Name: APPRENTICESHIPdots

    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       this is how i feel usually these days...

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    All the times that we have shared in this small leap of time
    All the smiles and all the laughter that we shared
    All the dreams that we dreamt and all the desires that we voiced
    -They keep me smiling when you are not around.

    All the times we held hands behind friends'
    All the hidden stares at each other
    All the sarcasm and our meaningful grins
    -They teach me patience when you are being your other self.

    All the times you go on about how I should be
    All the times you tell me how I should have dealt a particular situation
    All the times that you teach and I learn
    -They tell me that the journey to perfection is still incomplete.

    All the times that you hung up and left me suicidal
    All the times that you walked away and never looked back
    All the times that I asked and you remained silent
    -They made me wish you understood me a bit better.

    All the times you forgave me
    All the times you took the blame from me
    All the times you consoled and calmed me
    -They told me that you are trying to understand me better.

    All the times in these four months that we have known each other
    I learnt to rein my emotions and saddle my thoughts...
    Then I learnt to feed my anger and stable my tears...
    And now I look to the horizon...to ride away forever...to ride away on love!

    Submitted on 2008-03-13 02:35:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      sometimes repeating brings home a point.... some times a poet chooses to repeat things for that reason.... nice write I thought..... thanks for the comment Obaid....
    | Posted on 2009-02-18 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the sentiments behind it, but the entire thing was very very very repetitive.
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]

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