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    dots Submission Name: the raindots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe raindots
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    The rain falls and falls as I cry
    It helps me survive the pain inside
    You left me to fall on my own
    And yet I am here to with out you
    And I am here alive not dead.

    Did you think you could really fool me?
    Or was I just your fantasy.
    Your dream
    Your wish
    My nightmare

    I lived cause I knew
    Knew what you would do
    But I donít understand why
    Why you left
    Left me alone

    But I donít care
    I can move on
    Without you
    I have my own life to build
    And I will do it all
    Alone




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      wow that an amazing poem
    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by spellfire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very well written...I tottally get how your feeling...:)
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. The flow was a little off, but other than that it was great. I love the second stanza, I can relate to that like perfectly. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    ĽHaelyę
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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