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    dots Submission Name: My Missing Halfdots
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    Author: PrinceOfEvil666
    ASL Info:    16/M/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 4/5/7
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 852
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 565



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       This is for my twin. I will always love you. Don't ever think other wise. I am not sure if this poem does you justice, but it is the best I can do without your help.


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    dotsMy Missing Halfdots
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    When I first met her
    I was cold
    Hardened by years of being alone
    Solitude was
    Something I knew well
    I was "warm" to no one
    Not even her
    At first
    When I saw her
    I knew I would eventually
    Become a "warm" person
    When I first saw her
    I knew she was mine
    I knew she was the missing piece of my soul
    That I had been longing for
    She completed me
    She still does
    But now...
    I do not know why
    I am returning to the dark




    Submitted on 2008-03-13 22:12:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Onii-san, why won't you tell me what is wrong. You only write poems when soemthing really bad, or something really good, is going to happen. Mostly the really bad thing. Are you "In trouble" again? Tell me. why wont you talk to me anymore? I miss you. I want to see you. You told me not to talk to you anymore. Why? You even yelled at me for the first time in a year. Onegai, please, tell me.
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by PrincessOfDark | [ Reply to This ]


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