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    dots Submission Name: Godless America(My Home Sweet Home)dots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 867
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    Bytes: 1242



    Description:
       CAUTION:
    For anyone considering death to be closer to God, please be aware that God is a 100% fabricated character...


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    dotsGodless America(My Home Sweet Home)dots
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    You're waiting on the moment that you pass,
    Why? Your use has expired.
    When you refuse to help out
    You should just leave,
    Instead of posting up stop signs

    We've got so many things to do
    You've got someone to meet with, you
    should just leave!
    Go there!
    Cause You're not welcome here!
    Distracting us from progression,
    You're keeping us from getting things done

    You live for him,
    So die for him,
    He sacrificed for you,
    What would Jesus do?
    If you're afraid of death,
    Then where is your faith?
    Why don't you just go home
    Where it's so safe!


    If your motivation is God,
    your ambition is death,
    you're a tool without a use
    so tie a noose
    and save your breath...

    You can go to church
    but that won't get you to heaven,
    you have to be deceased,
    so what are you waiting for?

    ____________________________________________

    Quickest Way to Get to Heaven (die)

    Plus when you can live forever, what else is there to live for




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      WEll i am an aethist and i love this poem of yours hahaha

    I really enjoyed the way you potray someone who believes in god. My full support for your idea man.

    I have never read sucha a conflicting poem with a funny end(acording to me i
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    Hats off to you. I have written hell a lot of poems but not like this one. Great work write more like this....
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]


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