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    dots Submission Name: Pain in Patiencedots
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    Author: rosesrouges
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 32/42/42
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       This is to a guy who hurt me without having used anything sharp. This is roughly about the period it took for me to get over him.


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    dotsPain in Patiencedots
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    The blood that withers through.
    The bold that was once untouched.
    I start a life anew,
    I pulled a wind from a single clutch.

    Droplets of the sea so salty yet so sweet.
    It caresses lightly across the cheeks.
    I always dreamt for the winds to meet,
    But once again, the dream was nothing but a mere peek.

    The silence hurts and tortures the soul.
    A faint moan gave a single slight of hope.
    I waited and waited although having been told -
    I thought the pain of patience was nothing more than a slope.

    The fields turn from green to yellow.
    The sun finally begins to set.
    I heard the last sound of the cello,
    I'll end this poem before we first met.




    Submitted on 2008-03-14 10:03:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really think you dont give yourself alot of credit but for this one I'm gonna stalk ur posts... I know what it feels like if u notice my songs but life goes on and it goes on even better without him so stay positive. One little word could have been left out in this piece, first stanza line 4 "
    I pulled a wind from a single clutch" doesnt really flow with the rest of the previous lines but however by omitting the word "a" it does.

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    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]


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