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    dots Submission Name: its like rice dots
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    Author: rosesrouges
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 32/42/42
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       nasi lemak means rice. its a singapore local dish - rice + fried fish. i don't like nasi lemak. Anyway,im criticising how gullible one can be with listening to one side of the story to a conflict- especially when the person listen and acts out based on being biased. Ikan bilis is fish. LOL!


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    dotsits like rice dots
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    It's like nasi lemak.
    When you've bought it since a long time ago, you pick it up and throw it away today.
    But you forgot, there's the ikan bilis that has been perserved in that packet of nasi lemak.

    That ikan bilis you forgot to check.
    That ikan bilis you know even if you could still eat them, would taste bad though they're still good.
    That ikan bilis - plenty but none of which you would pick to eat because you never liked eating ikan bilis.

    Your forgetful character has caused positivity into your life.
    Although the pain of wasting it all was a premediated disaster.
    It makes you wonder.
    It makes you see.
    It makes you realise.
    Most of all it made you learnt.

    Yes, shun.
    But that action of shun was caused by the stupidity of being gullible.
    Listening and acting.
    But never Listening, thinking then acting.
    It's not smart honey.

    If that's the caused of predicaments then needless to say,
    im sorry for you.
    where's your stand?
    where then comes the brain that was an input to your head?
    do you feed yourself out of propaganda?
    would you be the one to hail hitler just after a speech made by that dictator himself?
    or would you ponder about the speech?
    would you rationalise your mind?
    would you clarify your doubts?

    fortunate to say, i do not really care.
    for thou is at the losing end of it all.

    oh, how wonderful if thou had known.
    maybe then thou would not be blind.
    maybe then thou would not eat that ikan bilis although it had been thrown.

    selfless?
    selfish.
    for i am selfish for am not telling.
    for they are selfish for they're not telling.
    oh how cruel the world is for you.

    ignorance is indeed bliss.
    well enjoy this bliss
    before the she bits you back in the arse.




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      WTF???
    its good and pretty funny but im just too distracted by the poem or...(what is it?) to accurately critique it...
    | Posted on 2009-04-09 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]


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